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It was a warm summer night when I found her.
Her dress was white with yellow sunflowers,
and her auburn hair was spread out around her pale face.

It looked like an ever changing halo
moving gently in a soft breeze.

She had lost a shoe

Like Cinderella

Her deep, blue eyes stared into heaven
and the freckles of her skin drew constellations
against the pale background to mirror the stars above.

Fish gently nibbled at her fingers and nestled in her hair
paying no heed to her ruby lips which her last breath had left open
almost like an invitation.

I looked at her
fascinated

I loved her...

Thinking it was the least I could do
now that she had been so carelessly abandoned.
Forgotten
It was my duty to remember her.

I took the memory of her and stuffed it away
for safe keeping
The rest was just a shell
now empty and soon decayed.

Then I left
leaving only the pond behind to swallow its secrets.
A small poem that came to be last night, out of nowhere, after having been drinking way too many energy drinks. My mind went down a slightly macabre road, and I just followed and took notes! Comments, critique and criticism is always welcomed :D
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theheartofShanna Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Pretty pretty
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:iconridderkvinden:
Thank you very much :D
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KoolShakes Oct 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely!
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KoolShakes Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome !!! :-)
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LivingDreamer97 Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was so gorgeously heart breaking... :happycry: Amazing work. ^.^
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:iconridderkvinden:
Thank you very much :) Happy you like it :D
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LivingDreamer97 Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! ^.^
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littleblueraccoon Sep 8, 2013  Student Writer
I love this! Something about the line "She had lost a shoe/Like Cinderella" gives me incredible chills. Like, there's a dead girl floating in the water, and you describe it with a reference to a fairy tale. The contrast is so creepy.

Well done! :hug:
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:iconridderkvinden:
Thank you so very much for the sweet comment :D I am very happy you like the poem :D :hug:
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