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Mine is not a face that would launch a thousand ships
Mine is not a body that would make men go to war
Mine is not a mind, sharp as a blade nor quick or witty
Mine is a heart that bleeds and loves none the less.

I am not a queen of beauty or elegance of ages past
I am not a model or scientist, nor a woman of career
I am not a fashion statement or a symbol of feminism
I am a woman with hopes and dreams none the less.

Mine is not a perfect home from the magazines
Mine is not the latest fashion or trends of clothes
Mine is not the accepted norms of life or style
Mine is the individuality of not caring for either.

I am not the person everyone else wants me to be
I am not the kind of woman people expect of me
I am not flawless, nor ashamed of the flaws I have
I am who I am, and I am who I want to be.
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I knew right off the bat the theme was a normal woman struggling with the world - then in the middle I got a splash of nice cold water. The writer isn't struggling, she owns herself, and her dreams, hopes, desires and journey. I reread the poem from the beginning and the theme is again clear - I am me.

There are no new images within the poem, but there is a freshness and a wonderful honesty to the words.

A nice rhythm flows, and the use of repetition is well done. I am also very happy to see 'I' capitalized. So many don't do this in poems (or even prose) and I'm not sure if they truly mean they have a deep disrespect for themselves, or if they simply don't know how to capitalize.

I also enjoy the way the writer contrasts herself with the images of what society says is ideal.

Overall I enjoyed the piece quite thoroughly.
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BlackRavenKuria Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well said. It has real true meaning in it and something to be proud of. It is good to like who you are not to be like someone your not. You enjoy life better that way if your don't care what others think about who you are. I feel for everyone of your words. You did a great job.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
Thank you so much for the nice comment :D And indeed, life gets a little easier if you accept who you are, and don't constantly try to change yourself to please others. It is impossible for a single person to please everybody anyway. They have to learn to accept and like you for who you are. :) I am happy you like the poem :)
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BlackRavenKuria Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome. And I totally agree with you.
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robphx387 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Professional Filmographer
I've only been on the site for a few days so far, but this is the best poem I've read in that time by far. I'm usually not a fan of poetry, but I'll slip this into favorites for sure. 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
*Chuckles* Thank you so very much for the nice comment :) I am happy you like it, and welcome to Deviantart! I hope you will find far more interesting things :)
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vaporsheart Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yesssss!!!!! i cannot agree more!! All i saw was me when i read this. I just love this poem~~ :iconyushplz:
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
Happy that you can relate! Thank you for the comment, and I am glad you like it :D
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vaporsheart Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconnpplz: I'm glad you wrote it :D
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Writer
Need a hug? 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
Hugs are always nice :) Though the point of the poem is that I am actually happy being me :D (I happen to love hugs though)
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Student Writer
*hugs you* Hug 
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SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013   General Artist
Ah, to be perfectly imperfect.  Lovely poem. ^_^
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
*Smiles* I am happy you like it ^^ Thanks for the comment.
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Jakesnakee Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
All I could think of while reading the first couple lines was Troy lol
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
*Chuckles* The first couple of lines has indeed been inspired by Helen of Troy ^^
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Jakesnakee Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol but sereusly you're awsome keep it going!
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Clamshire534 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
This is really cool, but the second line in that last stanza is kind of irksome 'I am not the kind of woman people expect of me'. maybe you were trying to avoid using 'want me to be' twice in a row or maybe it was just the way you wanted to write the line. Just saying I don't think the line really makes sense. But seriously, other than that this is really just great.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much for the comment and the observation :) From a grammatical point of view it should make sense, but as English is my second language, I could easily be mistaken and I shall correct it if it is further pointed out that it is incorrect :) Happy you like it though! :D
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Clamshire534 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
Oh wow, I've always envied people who know more than one language, good for you!. I'm honestly not sure if it's actually incorrect or if it just sounds strange to me.
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Dingding3211 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Inspiring, simple, effective. I really like it :D Very relatable to most people :)
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much for the comment :) I am happy you like it :D
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Illustriation Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Wow, this is very powerful. Your displayed depth is thought provoking. Thank you. :)
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :) I am happy to be able to provoke some thoughts with my writings :) I hope people will take the message to heart :D Glad you like it!
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smartally12-13 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I like it. It's simple and conveys a powerful message.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :) I am happy you like it :D
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Kurnalklank Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Popeye had it right, beautifully written.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
*Chuckles* Thank you ^^ Happy you like it :D
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student General Artist
This is lovely :)
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :D
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DaffyDaydreamer Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
A very inspiring piece! I love it 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :D Happy you like it!
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DaffyDaydreamer Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome :)
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Sesshomarusama3 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
I have no words to express the beauty of this!
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :D I am glad you like it :)
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Sesshomarusama3 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
You're very welcome! :heart: spread the word: be yourself!
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Song-of-the-Sirens Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
This is a beautiful poem, and always remember do everything for yourself not for other people because at the end of the day you still have to answer to yourself. 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much, and indeed :) I agree!
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Song-of-the-Sirens Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
You're quite welcome! 
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TheInkheart Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely beautiful! :love: I love this poem, this is how I feel(:
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :) I am happy you like it and can relate to it :D
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TheInkheart Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're so welcome! :hug: Thank you so much for writing it!
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jillian834 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
my body makes men go to war becaus DAYMN 
jk
I liked the poem
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
*Chuckles* Thank you very much :)
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
This good. My favorite line is "I am who I am, and I am who I want to be."
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FHYeah1 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Exactly what I was going to say ^.^
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
:)
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thank you very much :) I hope more people out there will take the message to heart really, and start to accept themselves for who and what they are, instead of trying to be what everyone else wants them to be.
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
So very true! :)
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LivingDreamer97 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.  So many girls feel like this because of what is shoved into our heads, we believe we have to have it all together.  But I believe there is beauty in the brokenness.  Thanks for writing to show girls out there it's fine not to have it all together and to show they aren't alone.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
People should indeed learn to appreciate inner beauty more, and it is rather devastating to see the lengths some young girls will go to in order to adapt themselves to the conformities of society instead of being who they really want to be, and really are.
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