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Mine is not a face that would launch a thousand ships
Mine is not a body that would make men go to war
Mine is not a mind, sharp as a blade nor quick or witty
Mine is a heart that bleeds and loves none the less.

I am not a queen of beauty or elegance of ages past
I am not a model or scientist, nor a woman of career
I am not a fashion statement or a symbol of feminism
I am a woman with hopes and dreams none the less.

Mine is not a perfect home from the magazines
Mine is not the latest fashion or trends of clothes
Mine is not the accepted norms of life or style
Mine is the individuality of not caring for either.

I am not the person everyone else wants me to be
I am not the kind of woman people expect of me
I am not flawless, nor ashamed of the flaws I have
I am who I am, and I am who I want to be.
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I knew right off the bat the theme was a normal woman struggling with the world - then in the middle I got a splash of nice cold water. The writer isn't struggling, she owns herself, and her dreams, hopes, desires and journey. I reread the poem from the beginning and the theme is again clear - I am me.

There are no new images within the poem, but there is a freshness and a wonderful honesty to the words.

A nice rhythm flows, and the use of repetition is well done. I am also very happy to see 'I' capitalized. So many don't do this in poems (or even prose) and I'm not sure if they truly mean they have a deep disrespect for themselves, or if they simply don't know how to capitalize.

I also enjoy the way the writer contrasts herself with the images of what society says is ideal.

Overall I enjoyed the piece quite thoroughly.
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BlackRavenKuria Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well said. It has real true meaning in it and something to be proud of. It is good to like who you are not to be like someone your not. You enjoy life better that way if your don't care what others think about who you are. I feel for everyone of your words. You did a great job.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
Thank you so much for the nice comment :D And indeed, life gets a little easier if you accept who you are, and don't constantly try to change yourself to please others. It is impossible for a single person to please everybody anyway. They have to learn to accept and like you for who you are. :) I am happy you like the poem :)
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BlackRavenKuria Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome. And I totally agree with you.
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robphx387 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Professional Filmographer
I've only been on the site for a few days so far, but this is the best poem I've read in that time by far. I'm usually not a fan of poetry, but I'll slip this into favorites for sure. 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
*Chuckles* Thank you so very much for the nice comment :) I am happy you like it, and welcome to Deviantart! I hope you will find far more interesting things :)
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vaporsheart Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yesssss!!!!! i cannot agree more!! All i saw was me when i read this. I just love this poem~~ :iconyushplz:
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
Happy that you can relate! Thank you for the comment, and I am glad you like it :D
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vaporsheart Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconnpplz: I'm glad you wrote it :D
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Writer
Need a hug? 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
Hugs are always nice :) Though the point of the poem is that I am actually happy being me :D (I happen to love hugs though)
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