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Have you seen my dream?
It's not that big
But it is mine.

Have you heard my opinion?
It's worth two cents
It's worth every dime.

Have you touched my heart?
It is very fragile
But I am willing to share.

Have you seen my dream?
It may not be much
But at least I dare.
Small poem popping up out of nowhere :) Critque and comments are always welcome!
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wildcat3264 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Wow ~ this is really amazing! It's so inspirational ^_^
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thank you sp much for your kind comment :) I am happy you like it!
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not-an-emo-girl942 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Hello, I'm a critic from :iconwriters--club:!  I absolutely love the concept here!  You crafted something that is short and sweet.  Each stanza has some big imagery that clearly holds a lot of meaning, and that is a beautiful thing. :)  I really love the heart stanza: it has a special life behind it that I really admire.

However, I would like to see you unify this piece a bit more.  Two of three stanzas include "it's", it may seem minor, but the third should stick to that pattern unless you have some reason to break it.  On the same note three of four stanzas finish off with "But..."; the last should be as well.


Overall, I love this piece, but I would like to see you take it further as well.  I hope to see more of your work soon. :)

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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014
Thank you so very much for the critique :) I am very happy that you like the poem, and grateful for the constructive criticism! I love writing, and often just write what comes to mind with little to no regard of shape, form or technique. It just goes from mind to pen. But, I believe it keeps me honest in my writings :) I will definently keep your advice in mind, and perhaps make a re-write of the poem some day. Thanks again for your comment :D
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L-Inque Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the simplicity and honesty 
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
Thank you very much :) I am happy you like it :D
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UnexpectedPoison Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013   Traditional Artist
A small but a heart-warming poem.:heart:
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
Thank you very much :)
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Kreatress Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very meanngful, yet sweet and simple. I love it! Good work. :)
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013
Thank you very much :D I am happy you like it :)
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KeithKash Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013
nice
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013
Thank you :)
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KeithKash Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013
your welcome can you be my watcher
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staypee Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow..... This poem is wonderful.. It pulls the strings in my heart!
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013
Thank you very much :D I am happy you like it :)
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xSilentRebelx Featured By Owner May 30, 2013   General Artist
Not bad at all.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
Thank you for the sweet comment :) I am glad you like it ^^
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xSilentRebelx Featured By Owner May 30, 2013   General Artist
No problem :0
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jangiyodha Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Student Digital Artist
love it..pretty cool :D
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner May 16, 2013
Thank you very much :D I am happy you like it!
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blacklotusdying Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
i love it! :)
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
Thank youuu :) :hug:
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LiDwyre Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student General Artist
This is lovely <3
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you so much :D I am very happy you like it :) Funny how the most random things suddenly pop up out of nowhere!
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LiDwyre Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh you are welcome~ hah yes, and you did right to take the chance to write it down ;3
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
I always have pen and a notebook close to my bed, just in case! *Grins* My brain often won't let me sleep because random stuff sudenly starts rummaging around :P
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LiDwyre Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student General Artist
I do the same! And I get really really frustrated when someone moves it of place =w=* Hahah, that's how it is ^^
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Never know when the muse will strike! But you can count on the fact that it is often at an inconvenient time when you have no pen or paper ready! :P
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LiDwyre Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student General Artist
That never fails~! Always when you are not ready uwu
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TMaR18 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes the little poems are the most profound. Nice work and thank you for sharing!
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you so much for your kind comment :D I am very happy you like it :hug:
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TMaR18 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome and thanks for the hug.
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Ymir-Eberhardt Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It says a lot without saying very much...I like it! Good job. ^_^
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thanks a lot :D I am very happy you like it :) Sometimes, you don't need that many words to get the message through.
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Mkota Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
Smple and cool
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you for your nice comment :D
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Ardikani4 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful! Simple in a way that makes it easy to read, yet stirring at the emotion in your words.

Well done!

Until we meet again...

Kani
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you very much for your kind comment :) I am really happy you like it :D
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Renval Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. Simply, and truly, beautiful.
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
:blush: D'aaawh! Thank you so much! :) I am very happy you like it :D
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vallyfullofemotions Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like it, It's very unique ^>^
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Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you so much :) It is the weirdest little things that pops up now and then :)
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